Story Review

Your Name : Sheena
Your age : 19
Title of your story : Last time
Website where story is located [ direct link me to your story ] :
Your screen name on the site : ShaSinkaShay
Chapters : IDK. Three I believe. Maybe four but I doubt it.
Posts [ how many POSTS or REPLIES have people made to your story ] : 105
Your EMAIL address [ so I can EMAIL you the critique if problems may occur ] : Mizz_Sheena08@yahoo.com

I Don't really know if I need my story critiqued but maybe a little help of where to go next because I have a little writers block you know.

But anyways

Thanks
Sheena

I don't know why the link isn't working but i'm going to try it again.

Alright ... I'll try and get to it.

For the URL thing, simply click on the little CHAIN [ third picture on the bottom row - next to the photo and between the flash (red f) button ] . There, just insert the URL and you can even type a little text to replace the URL but the text will still be linked.

Just want to tell you that I started reading the story. I won't critique it since you don't want it critiqued.

I stopped reading at m. 42

I'll be sure to get back to it and continue reading.

So far though, you said that you sort of need help with what to do next. Um, I'd try to add some dramatic irony into the story.

Meaning, I'll try to add in the story where the two people, Shay and Anissa [ I think that's what the two girls name's were ] have to work in like, the same place or SOME situation where the two girls are sort of related. Like, Annissa can befriend Shay and invite her over to their suite or their home, and Omari will have to deal with the situation.

Something similar to that would be VERY interesting to me. I'm not sure if you already did something like that in the story, because like I already mentioned, I only got to m. 42 .